1st cut- feedback

I showed a rough cut (see above) to a focus group devised of people I had interviewed previously about my film opening.
The general consensus from this first edit was that it was a bit boring to watch and they were not quite 100% sure that it was a thriller.

To improve, I decided that I was going to add a secondary plot line, shown with the use parallel editing of black and white shots showing someone digging a whole.